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"You did what!?" The purple unicorn fumed, staring at Rainbow Dash angrily. Dash recoiled slightly, never seeing Twilight Sparkle this angry before.

"Well, I mean Trixie is back, and you're the only one in Ponyville strong enough to duel her with magic, and I..." She trailed off. Twilight let out an exasperated sigh.

"You can't just speak for me! I don't want to fight Trixie!"

"Twi, last time you showed Trixie up by a mile and a half! I'd bet you could do it again!"

"That was six months ago! She's probably gotten much stronger since then!"

"Well, so have you, silly!" Pinkie rose out of a bowl of apples sitting on a nearby table

Twilight's anger subsided slightly as she pondered how long Pinkie had been there. Pinkie just stood beside her, munching an apple. "C'mon, Twilight, it'll be fun!" She said, mouth full.

"Yeah Twi, we've got till sunset to prepare!" Dash chimed

Her brow furrowed, knowing that she really had no way out. If she declined, it would seem as if she was backing out. If there was one thing to never do, it was back out of a challenge set up by someone like Trixie. And it probably would be fun. From Dash's explaination, Trixie just wanted to test her new magic. She sighed.

"Fine. But I'm still mad at you" She trotted outside. "At least there'll only be a few people there"

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"Don't know why I thought that" The stands were filled with ponies, cheering for Twilight. "How'd you even get these stands out to the outskirts of Ponyville?"

"Big Macintosh helped" Applejack said, motioning toward her brother. "Now don't you worry, Sugarcube, we've all got your back" Her friends sat on the sidelines, hooping and hollering. Even Fluttershy could be heard once in a while, and Angel sat on her head, waving a small flag.

"Still no sign of Tri-" As if on cue, the blue unicorn appeared in a brilliant puff of smoke.

"The great and powerful Trixie!" Snips and Snails yelled in unison

"The one and only! Now, Twilight Sparkle, are you ready for the duel? The rematch of the century?" Trixie reared up.

Twilight sighed. "Ready as I'll ever be" She said as she lowered herself to the ground. Spike, Snips, and Snails All stood between the two.

Spike turned to the crowd. "Fillies and Gentlecolts! Welcome to the magic duel between our own Twilight Sparkle and-"

"The great and powerful Trixie!" Snips shouted. Spike shot him a glance. "Thank you, Snips" He said through gritted teeth. "Let's just have a good clean match. And now, without further adu, let the duel begin!" They all ran to the sidelines opposite the bleachers.

Trixie fired a blue beam at Twilight, who stepped out of the way swiftly. She responded in kind, hitting Trixie with a blast that made her stumble. Twilight charged at Trixie, her horn glowing with her next spell. Trixie regained her footing and smirked, firing a purple light. It hit Twilight, and she teleported away, running into a tree.

"Teleportation spells? Two can play at that game"

She shot her own spell, putting Trixie up in a tree. They kept throwing teleportation at each other, disappearing and reappearing all over the field. They finally ended facing each other, almost where they had started. They fired again, the beams collided in midair, growing into a large orb. They pushed all their energy into it, pushing it toward Trixie, then Twilight, then back.

"Twi-light! Twi-light! Twi-light!" Her friends cheered, stepping closer.

Trixie and Twilight pumped all their energy, panting. The Ball grew giant, until finally

BOOOOMM!!!

A bright light blinded Spike and the ponies for a minute. When they looked back, Trixie and Twilight were gone. Along with the rest of Twilight's friends.

"Twilight?" Spike asked into nothing

"Trixie?" Snails looked around

"They're gone!" Someone in the stands shouted

The crowd gasped and started yelling

"Where... Where'd they go!? And... what if they can't get back..." Spike fell to his knees, Yelling at the sky. "NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!"

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Twilight Woke up, looking around grogily as she took in her surroundings. all her friends were scattered to and fro. They were in a mostly white room, With a few benches, a large cabinet, and some cubbies holding strange equipment that she didn't recognize. There was a large metal door in one direction, and a small room opposite it she could see through it's glass doors. In the small room Dash was against a wall. Everypony else was in the main room, Applejack on top of the cabinet, Fluttershy and Angel under one of the benches, Rarity against one of the walls, and Trixie in the middle of the floor. She searched for Pinkie, then became aware of something  heavy on her back. With a quick glance, she found her pink friend had somehow landed on her.

'Wait...' she thought, now a little more conscious. She didn't know what this place was. It didn't look like any place she'd ever been before, and nopony was around. 'How'd... the spell!' She yelled at herself. 'Stupid! You never cross teleportation spells!'

She shifted, and pinkie slid off her back and landed on the floor with a thud. Even with the fall, she was still out cold.

'Always was a heavy sleeper' Twilight started walking around, waking her friends up one by one. Applejack Nealy fell off the cabinet, but got down safely. Everypony looked around, slightly scared and confused. Except Pinky, she handled the situation with her usual energy.

"Anypony seen Dash?" Pinkie asked

Twilight pointed to the room, and Pinkie trotted toward the door. She didn't realize that it only opened from the inside until she smacked into it. "How are we supposed to wake Dash up if we can't get in?"

"Ah, let'r sleep. she'll wake up eventually" AppleJack looked around. "Anypony know where we are?"

"Well, wherever it is it's positivly filthy! just look at all this grime on the floor!" Rarity lifted a hoof in disgust. Applejack rolled her eyes.

"Um... Girls?" Fluttershy mumbled, unheard

Trixie spoke over Fluttershy "Well, maybe-"

"No! You have no right to talk! You're the reason we're here at all!"

"Me!?"

"Girls?"

"What kind of foal counters teleportation with teleportation! You're lucky we didn't end up in the walls! Didn't they teach you that wherever it is you learned magic!?"

"I wouldn't have had to if you hadn't-" She was cut off by a gruff throat being cleared.

A rather short man wearing overalls and a hard hat looked at the ponies with a shotgun in his hands, finger on the trigger.

Fluttershy mumbled "I tried to warn you"
Chapter 1: The Duel

I've sunk as low as writing fanfiction, I hear you cry. yes. enjoy it.
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artysmartytardy Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
how do you submit a fan fiction i cant get a preview on it!Rage rage 
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BlueLightningWoop Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
PONIES SAPPIN MAH DEMENSION
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ThePoketrix2 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconrarityspyplz::iconsays3plz:We've murdered your toys as well.
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Halloween137 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
ENGINEER :D
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Venlo-McSplosion Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
The concept is... interesting. You've piqued my curiosity, though your writing technique could use a bit of improvement.
In any case, I'll certainly be continuing to read. So far, it deserves at least that.
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GinKyofu13 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Wow, this story is... GOOD!
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iamsonic Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is....
Amazing... Pleae, do write more, I'm liking the story so far.
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guesswork00 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011
Well, for just starting out in fanfic you've got some funny lines in here, and it's a clever execution all the way around. Also, your prose is easy to read which is really my number one requirement for a story. It's not like we don't understand big words, but when people put together 20-syllable sentences with 4 words it is just sort of selfish of the author because he's stroking his own ego at the expense of his readers. Your text is clean and efficient, and your pacing is spry and dynamic. Good job!
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GuidingArc Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011
Hey I made my own fanfic... please check it if you want to
[link]
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GuidingArc Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
... I am confused... i want to make my own fic but what software should i use? microsoft word or google docs? I HAVE NO FLIPPING IDEA!!!!!!!!
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ChaosContrl Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student General Artist
And then you can use IBook Author to make epubs.
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ChaosContrl Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student General Artist
May I make you a suggestion?

Pages. Use Pages.
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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
I used Microsoft word, but really any word processing software will work as long as it has a Spellchecker. I would be lost without my spellchecker
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GuidingArc Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011
Ok... Thank you sir and i hope you have fun making your fics!!!
and btw: you ever wonder what would happen if Sam Fisher from Splinter Cell went to equestria? just curious.
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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
I don't know that much about splinter cell, so I couldn't really say. It'd certainly be interesting, I can say that much
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GuidingArc Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
Wait, the submition page is saying that i have to put in a preview picture... do i have to?
I'm really sorry for asking all of these questions. it's just that I'm new to this sort of thing and i want to do my best...
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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
You don't have to put in a preview if you don't want to.
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GuidingArc Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
Ah... I see.. thank you for your help and best of luck to your future endevours!
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DashieKitten Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I laughed when spike said "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

But, he should had said "FFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU~"
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PaiRho Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
Bwhaahahah, Awesome!
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bosoxrocker Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
well, there goes my afternoon
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TheEvilTater Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011
how did trixie get from being so lame to being as powerful as twilight?
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booklover41 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011
Hey I'm working on my on fanfiction when I came across this and it inspired me so I started a story that stats of just like yours but will change later. I just wanted to give you a heads up. By the names booklover41
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zeldamaster52 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011
there are some grammar errors, but overall its pretty good so far
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TempestRunner Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Pretty soon the engineer is gonna ask how to make cupcakes.
Then Pinkie says...
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FakePokemon64 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
*walks in with new idea for fan fic*

*sees fan fiction*

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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
I laughed way harder than I should have at this.
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FakePokemon64 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Guess I'l have to base them on the loadouts I have and the mods I've downloaded. Guile Soldier, here I come.
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Rileyman360 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
epic battle dude
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Eisgarth Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
I'm sorry, but I suspect the people who say you got the personalities right didn't even read the chapter.

Because as soon as I started reading it, I noticed that you gave Twilight a choleric personality. And if there is one character who is NOT like that, it's Twilight. And the rest of the chapter didn't really improve, so... yeah.
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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
I don't agree at all. You say she's choleric, but That's out of annoyance, She's not being angered easily. You wouldn't be annoyed if someone signed you up for something you really didn't want to do?
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Thanos-san Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh sweet Celestia, this is going to be awesome. xD
*hurrys to read the rest*
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Xeno-the-Hedgehog Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
There's nothing wrong with writing fanfiction. There is, however, much complaint to be had about plot convenience and OOC behavior.
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:iconxaldensmutanthamster:
As for plot convenience, well, I don't care. Yes Twilight miscasting a spell is a bit overused, but it gets them where I need to get them.

I do, however, disagree on OOC behavior. I believe the characters are well within their character, but feel free to explain why you think a character is not acting as they normally would in such a situation.
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steelscyther2k Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Student Artist
Charming story! Love the whole thing!
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holycrapabear Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011
:iconengineerplz: SPAH SAPPIN MAH REALITY!
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CaptainPrower Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:iconengineerplz:: AH NEED SOME DOGGONE HELP!
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bobdd0 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
o.o this is the best thing EVER
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AshMonsterr Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
I just peed my pants. <3
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Runostus Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011
Well written :)
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MagicaITrevor Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This....... Can't possibly get any better....... O.O *Keeps reading*
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Kakaw3t Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011
Oh my. My two favorites things in a story.
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swbite Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
this is relevant to my intrests
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qinop Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
"Short man in overalls."

Oh you.
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Anjeka Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2011  Student
I... I never thought of mixing these two...
Gr. Now I have to read the rest. xD
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zeb516 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011
MOTHER FUCKING SOLDIER!
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yoyokittycatlol Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
oh go enges pissed :noes:
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br2nd66 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
I just know this is crazy but devil may cry and my little pony
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Xaldensmutanthamster Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
Personally, I've never played any Devil May Cry games, but with all the MLP fanfiction I've seen I wouldn't be surprised at a crossover with anything at this point.
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br2nd66 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
I but think guy beati the hell out of eachother and talking ponies who are all about friendship it a contradiction
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